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The Clone Wars: Friendship is Magic (Feedback)

Postby Flagwaver » Thu Jan 02, 2014 12:56 am

Please use this thread to discuss the story The Clone Wars: Friendship is Magic!

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Re: The Clone Wars: Friendship is Magic (Feedback)

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Re: The Clone Wars: Friendship is Magic (Feedback)

Postby Flagwaver » Wed Jan 08, 2014 10:32 am

First update posted! Now, it is a Pony Story!
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Re: The Clone Wars: Friendship is Magic (Feedback)

Postby Flagwaver » Thu Jan 16, 2014 2:24 pm

January 15th updated!
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Re: The Clone Wars: Friendship is Magic (Feedback)

Postby Teru » Fri Jan 17, 2014 1:47 am

I can't really find anything wrong with it. The only thing somewhat screaming out at me that should be fixed is the pacing, because it seems like the mane 6 accepted Starfire's explanation pretty fast. Other than that, I can't think of anything off the top of head, so I guess I'll just wait to see what else that might need fixing. Good concept, good story, not slow and boring; I like it :)
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Re: The Clone Wars: Friendship is Magic (Feedback)

Postby Flagwaver » Fri Jan 17, 2014 1:59 am

Teru wrote:I can't really find anything wrong with it. The only thing somewhat screaming out at me that should be fixed is the pacing, because it seems like the mane 6 accepted Starfire's explanation pretty fast. Other than that, I can't think of anything off the top of head, so I guess I'll just wait to see what else that might need fixing. Good concept, good story, not slow and boring; I like it :)
I am actually fixing a little of the show-and-tell from the first entry. It is too much tell and not enough show. I'll be changing up the format to include a short vignette of his Jedi life before every other (or every, depending on how planning goes) story. This will also keep all of the posts more pony-centric.
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